Hi there, My name is Thiwakorn and this is things I gonna say.
Look, You have done good properly and in Thai typing I understood what you wanna mention to for all over.
But my lovely friend. The task instruction gave you the situations above. It's about your boss, the assignment and your boy/girl friend. You've supposed to answer referred to the story na ka.
Anyway, Your answer is not too bad. Even though It was far from the instruction said.
So I suggest you please focus more on reading instruction if you not sure about that then ask somebody who could help you. You can go to the course WebBoard, leave the question properly.
I hope you'd do it better next time,
Bye