Sorry for the delay in my response. I just back from long holidays.
Thank you for sharing good essay with me. It shows your English is fair
I need you to work more on the content of your resume. Let’s make it stronger by considering following viewpoints.
1. What were your achievements during your previous work, or in last year? E.g. project you’ve been involved, what were success look like?
2. Have you ever initiated new things to Card OTC team? If you have, can you tell me more the detail (why you need to do, your role, and result?, etc.)
3. Other issues that you want us to hear more about you. E.g. why do you think you are fit to CPS position?
Your input is valuable for us ka, so please share me again of your resume by this Friday 15th Jan.