As I mentioned in my note to you, y

As I mentioned in my note to you, you should try to be less wordy and more concise in your writing.

Results (Chinese Traditional) 1:

如前所述在我注意到你，你應該儘量少囉嗦，你在寫作方面更簡潔。

Results (Chinese Traditional) 2:

正如我在說明中提到你，你應該盡量少羅嗦，並在你的寫作更簡潔。

Results (Chinese Traditional) 3:

我在注意你所說的，你應該試著在你的寫作不囉嗦，更簡潔。